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Describe how feedback was incorporated about your argument into…
Describe how feedback was incorporated about your argument into your persuasive essay.
You might use feedback from your instructor or peers or from outside the class if you did not get any feedback from classmates.
Describe the decisions made feedback about the exploration of your issue.
Describe how you used feedback to make changes or support your original direction.
Describe the decisions you made based on feedback about source integration.
Describe how you used feedback to make changes or support your original direction.
Describe which writing strategies were most effective in supporting your argument, given your audience, subject, and purpose.
The feedback I received was This is a good start, but we need to see more distinction and detail between your arguments individually.
This should be organized as:
Issue 1: Sentence length
Argument A: 5 – 8 sentences explaining
Argument B: 5 – 8 sentences explaining
Issue 2: Sentence length
Argument A: 5 – 8 sentences explaining
Argument B: 5 – 8 sentences explaining
This is a great start, but we need to see another sentence or two that supports the validity of the argument for each key point.
This is a good start, but each resource needs to contain its own description as well as a few details about how it will be used to support your key points.
Please revisit the MLA guidelines for sources in an annotated bibliography.
We need to see some added detail here to explain the relevance.
The essay I used The disparity in rural Americans’ access to healthcare is an undeniable reality. Americans living in rural areas face an unfair burden where access to healthcare is concerned, significantly impacting their health, well-being, and quality of life. Compared to urban areas, rural communities have higher rates of preventable diseases, chronic diseases, and even death. For instance, rural residents are more likely than urban residents to suffer from heart disease, cancer, and stroke. The lack of access to healthcare in rural areas is directly responsible for these health disparities.
The lack of adequate healthcare in rural areas of the United States is an overarching issue that affects rural residents and communities. Recent statistics estimate that up to 20% of rural Americans do not have access to their primary care physician devastatingly affecting their physical and mental health. This means Americans cannot get preventative care they need, increasing acute and chronic illness, as well as disability and mortality. Even when rural Americans can access healthcare, the service is inadequate and of significantly poorer quality than those available in urban areas due to the lack of resources in the rural community.
As a supervisor of a family medicine clinic, I see first-hand the disparities patients face with the lack of patients with the lack of access in our rural area. Often, it takes months for patients to get in with their primary care physician, sometimes resulting in patients having to go to the ER for acute needs. This is a huge barrier for rural areas as the ER is then filled with patients for acute needs who should see their primary care doctors but due to the access issue patients use the ER as their primary care physician. This creates a burden and burnout in the ER providers and their staff.
Patients often opt to receive the care they need due to the lack of resources in our rural area for transportation, financial reasoning, limited provider access, and insufficient technology. This lack of access to healthcare can prevent rural Americans from getting necessary medical attention, leading to worsening health outcomes and a decrease in overall quality of life. Furthermore, individuals living in rural areas are more likely to suffer from chronic diseases due to a lack of adequate medical treatment and prevention. This makes it even more critical for these individuals to have access to quality healthcare to ensure their health and well-being.
I plan to become a healthcare administrator and my goal for my area specifically is to ensure we have access for patients to get the care they need between all specialties. I plan to have specialists rotate into our family medicine clinic weekly so patients can get the care they need. This will take the burden off primary care physicians and reduce burnout with our providers.
When COVID-19 hit many patients did not get the care they needed in our rural area due to no access to technology. Patients could not do video visits due to our internet in the area, as well as patients not having smart devices. Most rural communities have people who are on the lower income spectrum. They are either on Medicaid insurance or Medicare. They are on fixed incomes and cannot afford the extra expense for internet. Although technology has enhanced significantly it is not as beneficial for patients in rural areas to have access to virtual visits as it is for someone in an urban city. If the access to technology was better for patients in rural areas, they would be able to do virtual visits with specialists to better accommodate their healthcare needs. When a patient cannot see a specialist due to none being in the area patients live with diagnoses that are untreated because of the lack of access to providers.
Many rural communities, especially those located in impoverished areas, lack access to essential healthcare services. These communities often lack the number of doctors, hospitals, and pharmacies needed to provide adequate healthcare. Moreover, existing healthcare facilities often lack the specifications to adequately treat all types of illnesses or injuries. This ultimately leaves rural Americans underserved and without access to quality healthcare. Therefore, leading to primary care doctors treating patients outside of their line of scope.
In some rural areas, resources for healthcare are already spread thin. As a result, there is often a shortage of proper medical care, while existing resources are stretched too thin. Consequently, there can be long wait times to get appointments or receive medical care, further hindering healthcare access. As a result, some rural Americans are reluctant to seek medical attention, fearing they may spend too much money or must sacrifice too much time.
In some rural areas, technology is not as advanced as in other areas. This has resulted in limited access to cutting-edge medical treatments and technologies. Furthermore, information sharing between doctors and hospitals is limited due to low access to digital technology. This makes it difficult for rural Americans to receive the specialized medical attention they require. In some rural areas, there is no shortage of healthcare professionals. Many rural areas can maintain sufficient doctors and other healthcare professionals. Furthermore, some rural areas may be able to attract healthcare professionals from surrounding urban areas through medical recruitment campaigns. Access to medical facilities is one of the first effects of rural areas lacking healthcare. Residents of rural communities have a difficult time receiving timely and adequate medical care because of the significant distance between them and healthcare providers. Rural residents may have to drive for hours to get to a medical facility, which can be especially difficult for those with limited mobility or financial resources. The inability to get to medical facilities can delay diagnosis and treatment, which can lead to more serious health issues.
In recent years, advancements in technology, especially telemedicine, have allowed more accessible access to healthcare in rural areas. This technology has made it easier for rural Americans to consult with doctors remotely and even receive medical treatments. Additionally, some rural areas have seen improvements in infrastructure for medical services, such as hospitals and pharmacies.
Governments are now taking steps to impact the availability of healthcare in rural areas. These initiatives include financial investment in healthcare infrastructure, incentives for healthcare professionals to move to rural areas, and expanding telemedicine services. These new initiatives, adopted by numerous states, help bring healthcare services to those in need in rural communities.
The lack of access to healthcare in rural communities is a significant problem that needs immediate attention. Rural Americans face an unacceptable disparity in health care compared to other counterparts, with limited access to doctors and medical treatments. While some initiatives are being taken to improve healthcare access in rural areas, such as telemedicine services, there is still room for improvement. To ensure the health and well-being of rural Americans are accessed, it is essential that more be done in terms of infrastructure development, financial investments, and recruitment of healthcare staff to rural areas. Further action is needed to effectively tackle the unequal access to healthcare in rural communities and, thus, promote better health and lives for rural Americans.
However I am unsure how the feedback was used as I did not get much feedback
