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To: Alicia Moore, Manager From: Jason Simpson, Business…
To: Alicia Moore, Manager
From: Jason Simpson, Business Communication Analyst
Date: October 8, 2015
Subject: Adopting an Employer Sponsored Child Care Program
As ABC Enterprise continues to grow so do our needs to improve our employment benefits
package. We have a goal to be industry technology field leaders so we become creative in
attracting quality and qualified individuals to our company.
In recent studies family-friendly packages have seen as a determining reason in getting
employee’s as well as decreasing the economic effect that other benefits such as worker
compensation bring to our bottom line.(Kluwer)
There is a need for affordable child for our employee’s and propose we fix an on-site child care
to aid in attracting and keeping the most qualified employee’s. Providing employee’s with cheap
solution to their child care needs will result in lots of benefits for both the company and the
employee’s. Goals of employee retention and increased productivity can be had by assisting our
employee’s meet their goals of affordable child care, more accessability to their child and limited
travel time to and from their time to their place of work. Less stress of the employee will produce
no days missed to sick time and less health care costs.
Enclosed you will find my recommendations based on the research I have gathered on this topic.
Thank you for taking the time to consider adopting an employer sponsored child care program at
ABC Enterprise I look forward to working on this project as we develop a successful program
that will benefit the company and the employee’s. Feel free to contact me with any questions you
may have.
Perform a formal analysis using APA. The analysis should be two full pages in length. Use the above email to support your analysis; give your analysis depth by using the email review and learning on importance of good writing skills from different points of view. The analysis should address:
Describe the document’s purpose, if it is effective in meeting that purpose and why or why not. Give specific examples.
Describe the audience for the document. Address if the document is addressed to the audience appropriately, why (or why not). (You were the audience for the document–were you the right person?).
Describe the document’s format (look at the layout, font and size, line spacing, etc.) and discuss if it is appropriate given the purpose and the audience. Explain why or why not.
Examine if the document is factual, practical, concise, and clear. Provide examples demonstrating your remarks.
Examine the document overall and discuss its efficacy. Support your comments by referencing your source on business writing.
Part2
Rewrite the document and incorporate the changes you discussed in the analysis.
Give attention to
a clear purposethere should not be any confusion about the purpose or intent of the message
audiencethe message should be appropriate for the reader
tonethe message should use the appropriate tone for the audience
contextthe audience should understand the information (necessary background, necessary information, etc.)
message structure and formattingthe structure should be organized appropriately for clarity, audience and purpose
general writing mechanics (spelling, punctuation, grammar, etc.).
Requirements:
A minimum of three pages. The analysis must be two full pages and the revision (starts on the third page) is whatever length is required for the document.
